[40대 독학 Ielts] Writing Template 6-10 공유

• Template 6
  • International tourism has become a huge industry in the world. Some people think /that the problems caused /by international tourism outweigh the benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
    • At the present time, international tourism /is a big industry.
    • Meanwhile, whether this trend /has more benefits or more problem/is a frequent topic of discussion.
    • From my perspective, international tourism is definitely beneficial in many ways.
    • International tourism creates great benefits on different levels.
    • First and foremost, it provides individuals opportunities /to see a different culture first-hand.
    • According to my observation, visiting another country /is a comprehensive experience, which is much more enjoyable /than staring at another culture /on a computer screen.
    • Additionally, international tourism boosts the economy of the host country.
    • Take Australia as an example.
    • During the previous decade, international tourism /has produced numerous employment opportunities /in various sectors of Australia.
    • In the third place, knowledge gained during overseas trips certainly /helps eliminate a range of stereotypes tourists /have about the host country.
    • In this way, individuals /can expand their outlook and become worldlier.
    • Of course, non-biodegradable litter left behind /by tourists poses a big threat to the host country.
    • Nonetheless, tourist destinations /can certainly establish relevant laws and regulations so that this issue can be addressed.
    • Once the economy of the host country /has been enhanced by international tourism, it would be easier for the local government to implement effective strategies to solve this problem.
    • To sum up, in spite of the fact that international tourism /may impede the environment of tourist destinations, the advantages of international tourism surely outbalances its disadvantages.
• Template 7
  • Some people think that public health /is a responsibility of the government, while others believe that individuals should be responsible for their own health. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
    • In current society, whether public health /is the government's responsibility of individuals' responsibility /has aroused a debate.
    • From my point of view, public health /should be individuals' responsibility.
    • Individuals are supposed to be responsible for their own health /for a variety of reasons.
    • To begin with, individuals know their own health better than others.
    • It is evident that the government /cannot understand everyone's needs realistically, thus individuals must shoulder the responsibility /for looking after themselves.
    • Then, an individual's self-discipline /is the key to better health.
    • More exactly, nobody can replace an individual to manage their own lifestyle well /in order to improve their health.
    • Moreover, individuals, especially adults, must realize that being responsible for their own health / is also being responsible for the society.
    • In other words, if everyone is sabotaging their own health, there will be more burden for the society, which is not a place that people want to be.
    • Certainly, the government /needs to provide sufficient support in terms of improving public health.
    • However, the government /cannot do much apart /from offering financial support and education in this area.
    • As a result, the ultimate responsibility still lies in individuals' actions.
    • In sum, the government should contribute to public health, but individuals /must be responsible for their own health.
    • In this way, people will be able to live in a more wholesome society.
• Template 8
  • In multi-cultural societies, people of different cultural backgrounds live and work together. Do you think the advantages of multi-cultural societies outweigh the disadvantages?
    • Nowadays, multi-cultural societies /are best characterised by people of different cultural backgrounds.
    • In my opinion, the fact that people of diverse cultural backgrounds live and work together /brings more advantages than disadvantages.
    • Living and working in a multi-cultural society /creates a wide variety of benefits.
    • To start with, people can broaden their horizons by living and working in a multi-cultural environment.
    • Specifically, different cultures generates different viewpoints and ideas, which helps people to better understand the world.
    • Besides, people from different cultural backgrounds contribute to the society /in more creative ways.
    • Evidently, countries such as Australia and Canada /have more festivals to celebrate because of their multi-cultural nature, which means rich cultures /are fostered in these countries.
    • Above all, people from different cultures /help the multi-cultural society boost its economy.
    • To be more specific, immigrants as well as their families and friends /create a large amount of profit for the tourism industry, which directly generates more revenue for the multi-cultural society.
    • On the other hand, some arguments /can be made that multi-cultural societies /may have more conflicts.
    • The main reason for this /is that people from different backgrounds /may not understand each other well.
    • But closer examination /would reveal that multi-cultural societies /such as Australia and Canada /have very low crime rates, /as immigrants /are carefully selected by governments.
    • It is manifest that multi-cultural societies actually /have less to worry about in this respect.
    • Having considered all the arguments above, I would conclude that multi-cultural societies enjoy more benefits overall.
• Template 9
  • Schools should only offer subjects that are beneficial to students' future career success. Other subjects, such as music and sports, are not important. To what do you agree or disagree?
    • Currently, there is a debate about whether schools should only offer subjects that can help students' future career success(i.e., subjects such as sports and music are irrelevant)
    • As far as I am concerned, I believe subjects such as music and sports are equally important.
    • Compelling arguments can be made that those seemingly unimportant subjects such as art, music and sports /are actually just as important /as core subjects /like English and maths.
    • The first point with respect to this is that art, music and sports /make a student a well-rounded person.
    • There is no denying that a young person who is artistic and athletic /is more likely to be physically and mentally healthy.
    • Furthermore, subjects like art, music and sports .help students to identify their interests and hobbies early in life.
    • True, if a young person /is able to know what they are really passionate about, they can continue doing /what they enjoy in their adult life.
    • More importantly, sports, art and music help students strike a balance in their learning at school.
    • Clearly, if students only study English and maths at school, their life /will be very boring.
    • It may be tempting to argue that students should focus on /what makes them more successful in the future.
    • The fundamental reason for this that the mainstream society defines "success" /in a narrow-minded way.
    • By that I mean most people believe that making more money /is the only definition of success and they think learning English and maths helps them make more money.
    • But further analysis /would make it clear that being happy /is probably way more important than having more wealth in the long term.
    • On the basis of the above discussion, I believe that subjects such as music, art and sports should be taught in every school, apart from subjects like English and maths.
• Template 10
  • More and more young people use the Internet to socialise. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
    • People are having a hard time reaching consensus on whether using the Internet to socialise is a positive or a negative trend amongst young people.
    • To my mind, socialising online /is a negative development.
    • There is no doubt that social networking websites /have caused more problems than merits.
    • For one thing, cyber bullying poses a real threat to the wellbeing of young people.
    • As a matter of fact, cyber bullying happens on a daily basis on most social networking websites /such as Facebook and Twitter, which has led to the increasing suicide rate among youngsters.
    • For another, socialising online gives young people fewer chances to practice their interpersonal skills, especially face-to-face communication skills.
    • Undeniably, nowadays more and more young people prefer texting each other on Facebook as opposed to speaking to each other in person.
    • Besides, too many youngsters /spend too much time /on social networking websites, which wastes their precious time that should be spent studying.
    • More precisely, most teenagers spend more time chatting /with others online /rather than do their homework at home.
    • To be sure, social networking websites also provides young people with the convenience of contacting friends that are far away.
    • This is reasonable to the extent that some friends may live in other cities, so it is not easy to see them often.
    • Still, sending emails to friends /would be a more beneficial option /because emails are less time-consuming.
    • Thus social networking websites /are not helpful in most cases.
    • In the final analysis, despite the fact that socialising online /is a popular new trend, it does not help young people when it comes to communication, time management and mental health.
    • For this reason, I am convinced that socialising online is a negative development in general.